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Naslov sporočila: I think I've gone mad! Pon Apr 22, 2013 8:22 pm
First topic message reminder :
Torej, ker zelo rada pišem, predvsem pa subjektivno opisujem stvari, sem se odločila, da bom odprla svoj mali "pisateljski" kotiček, v katerem se bodo znašle različne zgodbe, tako v angleščini, kot v slovenščini Upam da vam bodo všeč!
P.S.: Zgodbe se bodo pojavljale čisto naključno, odvisno od navdiha, upam da boste razumeli!
P.P.S: Kakšnega komentarja se tudi ne bom branila
P.P.P.S: Trenutno sem bolj pesniško razpoložena
Nazadnje urejal/a Angel Rockefeller Pon Apr 22, 2013 9:43 pm; skupaj popravljeno 1 krat
Naslov sporočila: Re: I think I've gone mad! Pon Jul 15, 2013 12:16 am
Angel, ne piši nadaljevanja. Razlaganje nečesa tako nadnaravnega bi po mojem uničilo učinek. Tvoja zgodba je močna predvsem zato, ker ne rečeš na koncu "Bazinga, bile so ninje." ampak pustiš vsakemu bralcu, da pride do lastnih zaključkov in uporabi svoje izkušnje in domišljijo, da dopolni delčke, ki manjkajo.
Stil pisanja je pa sicer dober, samo morda bi lahko še kaj več opisala dogajanje in like, njihov videz, kakšne specifične poteze ali obnašanje, tako bi bil efekt ob tem nenadnem izginjanju še močnejši.
Naslov sporočila: Re: I think I've gone mad! Pon Jul 15, 2013 12:27 am
@Nathan: Sem že razmišljala o nadaljevanju, pa niti ne vidim zgodbe z glavo in repom, večinoma samo prebliske določenih hm...scen (bi se lahko reklo temu tako?) ampak da bi jih sestavila v neko celoto, pa ne. :P: Kar se pa opisovanja tiče, mi je pa veliko ljudi povedalo, da je to moja šibka točka točka pri zgodbah, and I'm trying, ampak če bom šla v opisovanje, se mi zna zgoditi, da se bom v vse skupaj preveč zabubila in pozabila na ostale stvari Kot sem rekla: I'm trying Mogoče moram pa samo vadit...
@Pip: Dobro pišeš in o tem se ne mislim kregat s tabo *mad grandma* O, kar dva, super
Naslov sporočila: Re: I think I've gone mad! Pon Jul 15, 2013 10:53 pm
15th of July, 1918
It's my birthday today and the entire thing was quite overrated. Papa has invited a lot of people, I've never heard for most of them, so I have absolutely no idea what he has been thinking at the time. I mean - it was my special day afterall, I really didn't want to spend it with strangers. Mama has done a rather good job of keeping me away from all those old people - and most of them were men! Have I told you that? Was I suposed to feel indangered? I do not know. Well, at last, there came the end of this horrible party (if you could call it that way) and I got to spend some time with mama and papa and they gave me you. Small black book and a very special pen. Mama has told me: "This, Evelyn, this is your very own diary. Write it regulary, so it will be passed on to other generations of this family." I remembered those words carefully. So you should know, who I am, dear diary. Afterall, you shall be filled with my words and my thoughts and therefore I must introduce myself. That reminds me: Is this diary considered as an autobiography, after I introduce myself? I do not know. Here it is: My full name is Evelyn Angela Rockefeller, I'm 15 years old from this day on and for a year, I was born in London, but then we moved to Hinskey Hill in Oxford. I have two parents; my dear papa John Rockefeller and my dearest mama Victoria Rockefeller. We might seem like an ordinary British family from 20th century, but I have to tell you a secret, dear diary: We're wizards! Yes, real wizards, with wands and spells and potions and such ... It's quite thrilling, when you think of it from antoher point of view. I'm about to burst in laughter, do forgive me, but it is funny. And late. I'll write to you (or into you) soon, but I beg of you: Keep my secret safe!
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Naslov sporočila: Re: I think I've gone mad! Tor Jul 16, 2013 7:50 pm
16th of July, 1918
I asked papa this afternoon, why he invited so many people yesterday. Do you know, what he said? He said: "Because it was proper to do so." Proper to do so? It was my birthday, for Christ's sake, and he invited a group of old strangers, who have never heard of me, except if I broke into one of their meetings. Today we went to the graveyard, because it was suposed to be Alice's birthday today. Alice was my sister, twin sister infact. I don't know, what happened to her. On that day she went into papa's laboratory, that is placed underground and after a few hours he came back, all worried, which quite surprised me, I thought that he would be sad. Mama was heartbroken, though. But she said a strange thing that day; she said: "The task will have to be passed on." Passed on? To who? And what kind of task? These are the questions, that trouble me ever since. If I find out, I shall let you know. I bet it's something really important. We also went to cousin Mildred's today. It was quite fun. She gave me this very interesting book for my birthday. Oh, and cousin Mildred is a witch as well! She's quite fun to be around and she showed me some spells, that I shall try to perform, when I'm back at Hogwarts! Now I must go to bed, I am very tired and our deal is still on! Remember? About the secret?
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Naslov sporočila: Re: I think I've gone mad! Sre Jul 17, 2013 10:53 pm
17th of July, 1918
I've changed. I am 15, so I guess it is normal to feel different, but not quite as different as I feel. I am scared, I think something big is happening. My cousins George and Harris came this afternoon. They're both father's apprentices in god knows what he is doing. Some sort of artwork, as he likes to call it. It has to do something with magic, because I haven't seen any real artwork in the house, and everyone from the family are wizards, so...Are you still keeping my secret? I certainly hope you do. Anyway, they came and as it appears they are going to stay for quite a long time...I wonder what is going on. Below the earth. When I told you, that I feel different, I was talking about my way of thinking. I don't consider myself a lady, though everyone tells me, I should do so, I want to be independent, not being served around, it just gets annoying. And when I saw a pair of scissors on my father's desk this morning, I thought about cutting my hair. Not like to the shoulder lenght or anything like that, but real short haircut. I don't think it's going to happen though. Papa would kill me if I did something like that. He says that it's wrong to cut your hair, if your a lady. Mother agrees with him. But I don't know, what is right or wrong. Not anymore. Well, I am a mess of thoughts, so I shall go straight to bed now.
Naslov sporočila: Re: I think I've gone mad! Čet Jul 18, 2013 12:27 am
18th of July, 1918
I woke up to the sound of that big clock, that we have in our library. I can hear it all the way to my room, so it's no surprise, that I could hear it. But I do wonder - why tonight. What on Earth must I do tonight, that I woke up at midnight. Well, I took a candle, I lit it, and I went silently into the library. There I saw my father's desk and on that desk a pair of scissors. Now I knew, why that clock woke me up. Without any hesitation I grabbed the scissors and I ran into my room. I thought I heard footsteps, but I guess I was wrong. So, I came into my room, I sat infront of the mirror and without any hesitation, I cut my locks off. I watched them, as they fell on the ground and I didn't think at the time. I just cut it. Then I looked at myself, dear diary and I started crying. I think I'll be dead by the end of this month, but I am not completely sure why would I die and what for. I hid my hair under my bed and now I'm writing to you. But I'm exhausted and I feel...like I'm forgetting. But I don't know what.
Naslov sporočila: Re: I think I've gone mad! Tor Jul 23, 2013 10:25 pm
23rd of July, 1918
I'm sorry I've been gone for so long, but everything is so strange. I remember going to sleep on July 18th, after I finished writing. Then I woke up and I felt...rested. I felt like I slept forever. But cleary, it wasn't forever, since I woke up. Anyway, I ran down in my sleeping shirt and bare-foot, I looked for my mother and I asked her, what date is it. She simply said: "July 23rd". So, basicly, I've been asleep from July 18th to July 23rd. And yes, I am still freaking out. I don't remember anything. Beside cutting my hair. I looked under my bed - all the hair was gone. After that I noticed strange red marking on my hand. Like someone would put needles into it. There is also a red scar on my neck. But I don't remember having those before and I can't remember anything, that happened in the period between July 18th and July 23rd. I am confused, dear Diary, and frightened, very frightened.